Write On Maui


Copyediting Services for all types of writing




Tips and Services for Writers

  1. First draft - Write what comes to mind using your flow of consciousness. Ignore the critic that comes to mind. Believe that you can write.
  2. Set a goal for the number of pages you want to write per day. With practice, three pages come easily under an hour of writing.
  3. Write daily to practice and to gain material to complete your goal.
  4. Contact us when you are ready for an evaluation or editing services.


Evaluation and Critique Services
and Rates
(Feedback before presentation to your agent or publisher)

1. Two readings of entire manuscript.

2. Evaluation emphasizes setting and theme, character development, voice, pace and dialog.

3. Critique involves overview of the storyline, credibility and readability; plot, structure, style, character viewpoint and use of creativity.

4. Additional consultation for Q&A's after Evaluation/Critique is completed available through personal meeting, telephone or email.

Evaluation/Critique Rates:
$55/hour or determined by length and content.


Copywriting Services
focus on mechanics of writing such as grammar, spelling, punctuation, typos and word usage.

Services include: proofreading and copyediting;
marketing and advertising copy (brochures, print ads,
direct mail letters, e-mail campaigns, advertorials,
names and taglines, TV and radio spots); public
relations copy (press releases, bios); and web copy.

Rates are flexible, with an average hourly rate of $60-75/hour. Projects can be billed by the hour or by a flat fee (including all meetings, research, writing, editing, proofreading and up to two
revisions). Client satisfaction is guaranteed!

Contact:Jackie Pias Carlin
for Evaluation/Critique, Copywriting, Proofreading Services.

Partial payment is due upon acceptance of manuscript and full balance due upon completion through PayPal.

Allow two-six weeks for completion, depending on length.

The Manuscript Analysts-

Jackie Pias Carlin is a former performing and visual artist. She has a Bachelor Degree in LIBARTS in Human Relations from the University of Hawaii and Masters in English from the Bread Loaf School of English of Middlebury College.

She taught creative writing in the Personal and Community Enrichment Program for Maui Community College, and Business Writing WI Class in the regular curriculum. She currently leads workshops in autobiography/memoir at Kaunoa Senior Centers in Maui, Hawaii and teaches English 100 Composition Essay at UHMaui College.

Her memoir, Spirit of the Village A Maui Memoir is in its second printing and was published in 2005, available at all Barnes and Nobles, amazon.com, and from her website: www.jackiepiascarlin.com. Ebook copies are also available on Kindle.

She believe anyone can obtain good writing habits by practicing the elements and basic structure of writing. Like Tai Chi, writing is a life long practice. Jackie lives on Maui, Hawaii and Las Vegas, Nevada where she exercises, cooks and gardens. She travels when the rates are affordable.

Her Evaluation/Critique services have assisted many writers seeking publication.
References are available upon request.

Sky Barnhart is a freelance journalist and was named
"2008 SBA Small Business Journalist of the Year" for
Maui County by the U.S. Small Business Administration.
Originally from Oregon, Sky earned her B.A. in
Journalism at the University of Oregon and M.A. in
English at National University in San Diego. During
the last 10 years, she has worked as a newspaper
reporter, magazine editor and marketing copywriter.
Sky taught Journalism at UH Maui College, formerly living
in Ha'iku, Maui, with her husband, Steve. She loves to surf, travel and garden.
Sky is currently an English professor at the University of Oregon.

Feel free to email if you have any questions. We look forward to hearing from you.

for Evaluation/Critique or Copywriting Services.

Partial payment is due upon acceptance for services. Full balance is due upon completion through PayPal.

Also visit http://writeonmaui.com, an ezine for writers.


"J. carlin has been helping me write a book. She is supportive
and positive in pointing me toward better writing, organization and techniques. Her advice is invaluable."
Dr. Pat Palmer-author of childrens books

"Jackie Pias Carlin showed me how to dig deeper into memories and feelings to express what was important in my life and how to make it understandable to a reader. I am indebted to her help in setting goals and challenges and encouraging me to write effectively and enjoy the process. Her insight and understanding made a difference."
Judy Robeck-Maui

"I was fortunate to obtain the services of Jackie Carlin to edit some of my writings. Her work was prompt, efficient and highly professional.

The editing she did and the critique she provided was very helpful to me in improving the quality of my writing.

I recommend her services to anyone who is seriously interested in improving their writing and would like to obtain the help of a highly trained professional.
William W. Dicksion, Author - Oahu

"Now that I find myself in this new world of writing I know that I would not be enjoying my late years without [Jackie's] teaching, so I thank [her] for all [her] help."
Mike O'brien, Author - Maui