and Critique Services
(Feedback before presentation to your agent or publisher)
1. Two readings of entire
2. Evaluation emphasizes setting and theme, character development,
voice, pace and dialog.
3. Critique involves overview
of the storyline, credibility and readability; plot, structure, style,
character viewpoint and use of creativity.
4. Additional consultation
for Q&A's after Evaluation/Critique is completed available through
personal meeting, telephone or email.
$55/hour or determined by length and content.
focus on mechanics of writing such as grammar, spelling,
punctuation, typos and word usage.
proofreading and copyediting;
marketing and advertising copy (brochures, print ads,
direct mail letters, e-mail campaigns, advertorials,
names and taglines, TV and radio spots); public
relations copy (press releases, bios); and web copy.
Rates are flexible,
with an average hourly rate of $60-75/hour. Projects can be billed
by the hour or by a flat fee (including all meetings, research, writing,
editing, proofreading and up to two
revisions). Client satisfaction is guaranteed!
for Evaluation/Critique, Copywriting, Proofreading Services.
payment is due upon acceptance of manuscript and full balance due
upon completion through PayPal.
Allow two-six weeks for completion, depending on length.
The Manuscript Analysts-
Jackie Pias Carlin is a former performing and visual
artist. She has a Bachelor Degree in LIBARTS in Human Relations from
the University of Hawaii and Masters in English from the Bread Loaf
School of English of Middlebury College.
She taught creative writing in the Personal and Community Enrichment
Program for Maui Community College, and Business Writing WI Class
in the regular curriculum. She currently leads workshops in autobiography/memoir
at Kaunoa Senior Centers in Maui, Hawaii and teaches English 100 Composition
Essay at UHMaui College.
memoir, Spirit of the Village A Maui Memoir is in its second
printing and was published in 2005, available at all Barnes and Nobles,
amazon.com, and from her website: www.jackiepiascarlin.com. Ebook
copies are also available on Kindle.
believe anyone can obtain good writing habits by practicing the elements
and basic structure of writing. Like Tai Chi, writing is a life long
practice. Jackie lives on Maui, Hawaii and Las Vegas, Nevada where
she exercises, cooks and gardens. She travels when the rates are affordable.
Her Evaluation/Critique services have assisted many writers seeking
are available upon request.
Barnhart is a freelance journalist and was named
"2008 SBA Small Business Journalist of the Year" for
Maui County by the U.S. Small Business Administration.
Originally from Oregon, Sky earned her B.A. in
Journalism at the University of Oregon and M.A. in
English at National University in San Diego. During
the last 10 years, she has worked as a newspaper
reporter, magazine editor and marketing copywriter.
Sky taught Journalism at UH Maui College, formerly living
in Ha'iku, Maui, with her husband, Steve. She loves to surf, travel
Sky is currently an English professor at the University of Oregon.
free to email if you have any questions. We look forward to hearing
for Evaluation/Critique or Copywriting Services.
payment is due upon acceptance for services. Full balance is due upon
completion through PayPal.
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"J. carlin has been helping me write a book.
She is supportive
and positive in pointing me toward better writing, organization and
techniques. Her advice is invaluable."
Dr. Pat Palmer-author
of childrens books
"Jackie Pias Carlin showed me how to dig deeper
into memories and feelings to express what was important in my life
and how to make it understandable to a reader. I am indebted to her
help in setting goals and challenges and encouraging me to write effectively
and enjoy the process. Her insight and understanding made a difference."
"I was fortunate to obtain the services of Jackie Carlin
to edit some of my writings. Her work was prompt, efficient and highly
The editing she did and the critique she provided was very helpful
to me in improving the quality of my writing.
I recommend her services to anyone who is seriously interested in
improving their writing and would like to obtain the help of a highly
William W. Dicksion,
Author - Oahu
"Now that I find myself in this new world of
writing I know that I would not be enjoying my late years without
[Jackie's] teaching, so I thank [her] for all [her] help."
Author - Maui